On the Morning of
September 11th, an al Qaeda group hijacked four commercial airplanes
and carried out the deadliest terrorist attack in history on American soil. On
this tragic day two airplanes were flown into the world trade center buildings,
another into the pentagon with the third failing its attack on Washington and
crashed in an open field in Pennsylvania. This day has will forever be a dark
day in American history; furthermore these events launched us into the longest
war in US history, as well as changing all aspects of American life. From a
complete invasion of our privacy with the passing of the patriot act, to a
constant fear of future unexpected terrorist attacks the government has the
American people in anxiety and dependent on the government, which is right
where they want them.
Since the attacks
of 9/11 the government has significantly escaladed its level of security, some
argue that such actions were an overreaction, but it absolutely was a
necessity. From the forming of the Transportation Security Administration
better known as the TSA, to the expansion of the National Security Agency (NSA)
the government is now able to monitor at a larger scale, and has a better
ability to prevent future terrorist attacks, as well as monitor possible terrorist
and their connections. Additionally to advancements in such security measures,
America has made tremendous strides on the war on terrorism, besides the
claimed victory in Iraq, the US has killed Osama bin Laden and has been
victorious in fighting the Taliban in Afghanistan.


The United States
government might claim victory over the war on terrorism, but when taking into
account the drastic cost it has had on the US economy and the sacrifice made by
its people, there doesn’t seem much to celebrate over. Furthermore the American
people has unwillingly lost its privacy, and have found themselves living under
a microscope while paying for a war that not many support and all hope it soon
comes to an end.
References
Amadeo, K. 2014. What Are the Facts About the War on Terror Costs. [online] Available at: http://useconomy.about.com/od/usfederalbudget/f/War_on_Terror_Facts.htm [Accessed: 3 Mar 2014].
Sahadi, J. 2014. What the NSA costs taxpayers. [online] Available at: http://money.cnn.com/2013/06/07/news/economy/nsa-surveillance-cost/ [Accessed: 3 Mar 2014].
Statisticbrain.com. 2014. U.S. War Death Statistics | Statistic Brain. [online] Available at: http://www.statisticbrain.com/u-s-war-death-statistics/ [Accessed: 3 Mar 2014].
Washington Post. 2014. Al-Qaeda force captures Fallujah, site of bloodiest battle of Iraq war. [online] Available at: http://www.washingtonpost.com/world/al-qaeda-force-captures-fallujah-amid-rise-in-violence-in-iraq/2014/01/03/8abaeb2a-74aa-11e3-8def-a33011492df2_story.html [Accessed: 3 Mar 2014].
Andres,
ReplyDeleteVery well-written and informative post. You educate your readers with lots of knowledge and history in this piece. You also include some great facts and figures, that give some great background information for people to digest.
I would like to see you now take those facts and sew them into your argument - all throughout your post. Use those facts to fuel your argument or discredit the opposing viewpoint (in this case, those people/political parties) that support the wars, are ok with the NSA and Patriot Act, and generally feel that more protection is better.
I'd like to see your posts get stronger with a solid thesis. This post is excellent, but it doesn't seem too persuasive. It's more informative. Your post should be a strong argument that you eventually win in the final paragraph.
This post is great as an introduction to the topic. You wrote a great, newspaper-like article. Your pictures and your design are great - it looks very professional.
Just try to make your argument more clear. Let your thesis - the answer to the question: did the US overreact? - lead the entire discussion.
Overall, great work. Keep it up! You're putting great thought and effort into each week, and it shows by the professionalism in your writing.
Try to take my suggestions and improve each week.
GR: 93